airscottie

I did enjoy your documentary, and I, too, found it eyeopening, but I think "sloppy" is an understatement. Parts of it seem very professional (premise, execution, storytelling) but the soundtrack and ridiculous voice-over that you do when describing a hobo-term really detract from the experience. You have enough here to really say something and I commend you for having the balls to go through with this, but the amateurish and downright immature nature of some of the audio presentation has got to be reworked. Rerecord some of those things, get a less obtrusive and grating soundtrack, and you might really have something here.

This isn't meant to insult in any way, this really is great. But parts of it are really keeping it from being ready for prime time.

There's a difference between "lighthearted" and "silly/distracting." Those presentation points, to me, are the latter. I agree that it doesn't have to look like a Michael Moore movie, but there's something to be said for professionalism and treating your audience like knowledgeable and educated adults.

I guess it's more of a comment than a question, but I guess I want to see what he thinks of similar criticism, since he even addressed it a bit in his original post.